Well, ironically, it isn’t… it is just that the aspect that it represents would seem to me the aspect that he is claiming is causing the problems. I would have thot that this was the male aspect as revealed by that conv with Chad way earlier in the book… ‘experiment, have fun, etc.” and was revealed in the ‘vibrator’ chapter.

Now, as for the ‘having respect’… you know how I agree with that!

My thots about this whole ‘in public’ thing for Jeremy.

>>we GET she’s having trouble and more exposition is annoying.

Interesting perspective, hadn’t thot of that.

>> “but the whole idea grosses me out.”

I’m having trouble with how Marsh has gone from a moment of panic, based on a brief mental image to this statement. One would think her enthusiasm would be intact, and she’d simply be trying to avoid that image. Instead, she’s almost instantly gone from being trying to retain her masculinity intellectually (but succumbing to female instinct) to trying to embrace her femininity but being blocked by male instinct.

Of course I can see that happening eventually, but the sequence seems… off. Trying to force the issue by plunging prematurely into intercourse seem an odd choice for either aspect of her personality – and for a character we’re supposed to have respect for. I suppose I’ll just have to wait and see if it gels in future chapters, but for now I have to agree with von – I’m not getting her motivation. In other news:

We really need to see this “logic trouble” expanded on or explained in the near future. We don’t need further examples, we GET she’s having trouble and more exposition is annoying.

The same for “Or did I always expect some kind of good night kiss or cuddle at the end?” That he’s getting a different perspective on his male persona is a point already made; the only new bit is that the lesson may be lost, as he’s forgetting his former motivations.

That’s no good. I’ll still be checking in every day or two, because I really enjoy your story.

Small typo there, I think. More commentary when I’m awake.

What I meant to say is, you can really read into marsh here where she is fighting over her orientation. She knows she is attracted to men now, but she is still looking at things as a man that is now a woman, not just as a woman. The flashes of his memories of him and his girlfriends makes sense, and I think the horror he experiences (from what I read) is based on his lack of knowledge about sex from the other side. Maintaining a normal day gets to be easier, but I think this is going to be a large hump to get over (pardon) because it gets down to the very core of being.

A lot of fiction including transformation/gender-swap over fantasize or fanservice into softcore porn. This is taking a great approach, keeping the story out of the gutter, and making it about how he feels, now about what he feels. I can see this being a great new arch that hounds for a while, and I hope, Russ, that you don’t plan to end this one soon. A lot of great story can be garnered from sexual tension, this is just a new way to do it.

Keep writing Russ. Don’t mind me or Sc0tt.